Puzzled (first edit)

[Volaticus]

Really I'm just seconding everything AJ said. The concept works well, the last two stanzas built into a rhythm and I think are great, the first is a bit weaker than the others.

My only other criticism is the title - 'confuzzled' massacres the good poem you've written.

I love the concept though

Hi Amy,
Thanks for your response and your kind words
I'm glad to hear the concept seems to work
It seems the first stanza needs the most work, and I'll try and make it match more with the rhythm of the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.
Yeah, I know the title is not great. Lets just say its only the working title Thanks again
- LB