04-10-2013, 07:53 AM
Really I'm just seconding everything AJ said. The concept works well, the last two stanzas built into a rhythm and I think are great, the first is a bit weaker than the others.
My only other criticism is the title - 'confuzzled' massacres the good poem you've written.
I love the concept though
My only other criticism is the title - 'confuzzled' massacres the good poem you've written.
I love the concept though
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)