03-19-2013, 08:06 AM
Hi Mattzilla303, welcome to the forum. 
What you have here is something I would call prose, having said that I do sense emotion behind the piece which is nice, but it is just nice- I want it to take my breath away. Think metaphor, simile, personification and how would you describe such love in a concrete image- goodluck.
saeity.
What you have here is something I would call prose, having said that I do sense emotion behind the piece which is nice, but it is just nice- I want it to take my breath away. Think metaphor, simile, personification and how would you describe such love in a concrete image- goodluck.saeity.