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Subtraction by Subtraction
Some writer juxtapose opposites
in an attempt to be clever;
yet the only cleverness
apparent is its lack.
erthona
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The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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(08-11-2016, 03:35 AM)Erthona Wrote: Subtraction by Subtraction
Some writer juxtapose opposites
in an attempt to be clever;
yet the only cleverness
apparent is its lack.
erthona
©2016
Overall a good poem which seems to capture my own attitude about what I create sometimes. I like how the poem juxtaposes The Desire for creativity and the lack thereof. The content is more critique than poetry though. How might the lines demonstrate or explore the failure of an aspiring writer?
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Well this was meant to show by example
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Are you making fun of me Dale? Is it "writers"? "juxtaposes"? Why am I going crazy reading this.
I'll be there in a minute.
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(08-11-2016, 09:41 AM)Erthona Wrote: Well this was meant to show by example
dale
Fair enough. That would explain the semicolon
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You forgot the enjambment.
dale
"Are you making fun of me Dale? Is it "writers"? "juxtaposes"? Why am I going crazy reading this."
Because there is a plural/singular thrombosis which is causing you to experience a brain infarction
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'writers'?
Some writers write
from a very high horse.
They think they're amazing;
they're rubbish, of course.*
*mclusky
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Some writers write from a very high chair,
breathing in the rancid rarefied air,
whilst fondling nuts from Macadamia,
and stroking the balls of Academia.
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Some reader demand a poem conform,
a prisoner dressed in orange.
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a prisoner dressed in orange
is juice beneath my pen...
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After a long sentence
the prisoner is set free
to wear whatever colors
or undress what he sees.
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Dale mocks all of us! The only good poets are the ones sponsored by the rich and powerful --- they're the one who actually have something to say, aside from their navels! xD I really think it should be "writers", though.
So wait, is a lack of cleverness in itself clever? Those last two lines are a little paradoxical -- but then, the title....isn't? Good God, the hilarity! (a less ringing note would probably be "yet the only cleverness / apparent's somewhere else." Or something.
