bagels
#1
Why worry about the small things,
When you are eating a bagel?
Bagels do not care if you are sad,
or glad for that matter. They are just
freaking good.

So good endless circles,
will truly never end.
Even when it swirls down
out of view. The bagel
will make the sewers day too.

Miss, miss slice me up that cranberry
wheat delicious bagel fairly. In half please.
Then my whole life will become merrily
peaceful.

Did you say bagel of peace?
God thought with a ominous giggle.
The earth shuck, but at that current moment,
I laugh an awful little.

Bagel of peace blessed art thou,
whom thy own grain, protect me
meow. I pray to the God of bagels.
Don't fret because than I'll forget.

Fuck man I am eating a bagel.
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
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#2
Why worry about the small things?
When you are eating a bagel?

Could be one sentence and one question over those two lines.


Bagels do not care if you are sad,
or glad for that matter. They are just
freaking good.

So good and endless circle,
that will truly never end.
Even when is swirls down
out of views. The bagel

Are "is" and "views" the way you want them?


will make the sewers day too.

Is it possessive?


Miss, miss slice me up that cranberry
wheat delicious bagel fairly, in half please.

The punctuation could do something more for these two lines.


Then my whole life will become merrily
peaceful.

Did you say bagel of peace?
God thought with a ominous giggle.
The earth shuck, but at that current
moment, I laugh an awful little.

Shuck, maybe. It could be.


Bagel of peace blessed art thou,
whom thy own grain, protect me
meow. I pray to the God of bagels.
Don't fret because than i'll forget.

I'll forget.

Fuck man I am eating a bagel.
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#3
(07-18-2013, 03:22 AM)Bunx Wrote:  Why worry about the small things?
When you are eating a bagel?
Bagels do not care if you are sad,
or glad for that matter. They are just
freaking good.

So good and endless circle,
that will truly never end.
Even when is swirls down
out of views. The bagel
will make the sewers day too.

Miss, miss slice me up that cranberry
wheat delicious bagel fairly, in half please.
Then my whole life will become merrily
peaceful.

Did you say bagel of peace?
God thought with a ominous giggle.
The earth shuck, but at that current
moment, I laugh an awful little.

Bagel of peace blessed art thou,
whom thy own grain, protect me
meow. I pray to the God of bagels.
Don't fret because than i'll forget.

Fuck man I am eating a bagel.

Nothing like a good bagel. Thumbsup
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#4
rowens! i do agree with the suggestions. there was a poop joke in there.
brownlie. i do agree
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
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