Hope

[Aphroditeny]

I find it totally amazing 
How we forget that which is bad 
How problems disappear with dread 
How light we make that which is lead 

How heavy hearts begin to beat 
That which was sour becomes sweet 

How we romantisize the past
Yet we all know it would not last 

How we still miss those sacred days 
The pure salvation of sun rays 
The heat that greeted us each morning 
When mondane tasks were never boring 

How dreams again take shape and form
How in this life this is the norm

How hope as flowers blooms again
How crazy feelings become sane 

How memories take different forms
How bulls somehow dispose of horns

[NakedBear]

Reading over you poem, I notice there are many couplets that indicate some hopeful change while there are a couple stanza which seem to contradict that mood (they seem to have been dropped into the middle of the piece: S3 and S4).

You're in need of a more orderly narrative. Also, there's little hint about why hope springs eternal, which I think would be an interesting theme to discuss.

Mikey.

[Aphroditeny]

Reading over you poem, I notice there are many couplets that indicate some hopeful change while there are a couple stanza which seem to contradict that mood (they seem to have been dropped into the middle of the piece: S3 and S4).

You're in need of a more orderly narrative. Also, there's little hint about why hope springs eternal, which I think would be an interesting theme to discuss.

Mikey.

Hi Mikey,

My intent with this piece was to portray meloncholy of long lost days of love but that life goes on and we forget the bad and remember the good in order to move on ahead and to allow oneself to hope/dream again.