Haibun & Haiku

[cidermaid]

Inspired by Song of songs 1:4

First light
We thought this day would never come. Daily we visit the vineyards, only to find that there was nothing to see yet. This season has crept up on us, slowly unfolding, tardy to our eyes and yet somehow we are now surprised it has arrived. O happy day…Today! We nearly missed the big event and this after we watched so closely. First light and morning mist gave way to cold, grey nothing days. The bare earth and brown sticks gave us no hope for anything more fruitful than the brief warmth of a bonfire. This then extinguished; cold water poured out on us from above. Sodden, having nothing to show for our ill conceived excursion, we trudge home again. Then a blaze of brilliance breaking out, a single bud burst from its casket of darkness. A bright lance; a conquering knight leading his followers out, light led the way and broke out of the tomb. The darkness was put to pay. Overwhelmed with where to look next; so fierce, so vibrant and verdant was that first flush that we had to avert our eyes. Before we knew it, a blossoming blush was spreading out and upon the air, a sweet perfume, heavy with promise. This could only mean one thing…the harvest would come. A miracle before our very eyes and wine for the wedding.

Autumn harvest rush
Sealed bliss - sweat red first kiss
Better yet, your love.

[billy]

did you mean sweet?

Flowers appear on the earth;
the season of singing has come,
the cooing of doves
is heard in our land.
The fig tree forms its early fruit;
the blossoming vines spread their fragrance.
Arise, come, my darling;

i'm not sure but i think the haiku leans more toward a senryu. but i enjoyed it along with the haibun

[cidermaid]

Yes ...sweet. (type error...my comp kept corrupting the text when i tried to cut n paste...my comp technical ability is about on the same par as my poetry knowledge...but at least I can enjoy the poetry which is more than can be said for the computor skills).
thanks for reading and the encouragment.

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ps such is my poetic form ignorance i don't even know what a... (pause while i see how to spell it...) senryu is!
Will be off to have a look at the rules and test against example above (and others I have tried)
This has been my journey into poetry so far....feel creative....go search some poetic forms..have a bash (with the rules in front of me)...hide the results !
Posting on a forum is me being brave.

[cidermaid]

Right I've done some homework...is it a hybrid (nature & human)?

[billy]

i'd say so. the haiku is an image or slice in time of nature, a senryu can be an idea or feeling. etc though i have been wrong before now