Monostitch-ish

[Todd]

I like the humor in this...It holds together.

The challenge would be trying to condense the lead in.

It's fun though.

[billy]

it's harder than it seems to give feedback to a one-liner

i like the use of two metaphor in one short line

[Leanne]

i jumped from a cliff you thought i was an angel

I like the concept very much -- the grammar lets it down, however, since there needs to be punctuation or a line break. I know it's all super trendy to cummings things up without caps and punctuation, but even cummings would have broken the line somewhere (probably after "cliff"). Why am I so mean? Because I'm tired of the prejudice against semi colons! One here would immensely improve the piece and keep in on one line.

By the way, can we please start spelling the word correctly? It's monostich -- a stich is a line of poetry, pronounced "stick".

[Leanne]

You're welcome to disagree and it's your poem, however it has NO impact for me based on the lack.