experimental poetry!

[J.K. Solberg]

• )pen the shades grey flowers are good by
  

       .
      : see the now blue unset, red herlips on the hereyes
     i am a mapleseedfalling goodbye
    ; for tofall is tofly is tosayyouaremy
  (
       love
                 ,

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Questions are welcome! I know this is a very abnormal poem. It's inspired by E.E. Cummings' style. Thanks for reading and/or commenting!

[wasellajam]

Hi, JK, I haven't been able to make sense of the punctuation marks so if they say something vital to the poem I have missed it. All I can do is comment on my read on the off chance it helps.

• )pen the shades grey flowers are good by
  I have open the shades, grey flowers to me are past their "good by" date but I don't think that's what you're saying.
  

       .
      : see the now blue unset, red herlips on the hereyes
I've got a blue sky with sunset, blue eyes and red lips and tulips, really no idea why it's written this way.
     i am a mapleseedfalling goodbye
I love mapleseedfalling as it gives a bit of that helicopter glide down and reminds me of being a kid, removing the sticky seed and putting the wings on our noses. But I don't think that's where you're aiming.
    ; for tofall is tofly is tosayyouaremy
This line worked for me, the combined words flanking is/is.
  (
       love
 meh, love does not stand on its own.                ,

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Questions are welcome! I know this is a very abnormal poem. It's inspired by E.E. Cummings' style. Thanks for reading and/or commenting!

So for me, if you have something to say I think there may be a more effective way to say it. I hope someone else has better luck with it and can be more helpful.
Thanks for posting, I hope you enjoy the site.