light

[Mark A Becker]

light beyond the stars
beyond the deepest darkness
closer than our tears

light beyond the stars
beyond the deepest darkness-
closer than your tears

[TranquillityBase]

If the tears are that far away.....and my mind boggles.  I'm left in a state of wonder. I guess that's what a good poem should do, leave you in a sense of wonderment.

[Mark A Becker]

If the tears are that far away.....and my mind boggles.  I'm left in a state of wonder. I guess that's what a good poem should do, leave you in a sense of wonderment.

Thanks Tim-  I lost my youngest brother very recently, and it should've been his birthday last week.  That's how this one came to mind...  It's a kinda, sorta Christmas poem. I should've written this as "closer than MY tears" or "OUR tears" instead of "YOUR" tears, since he no longer has tears, but I/we still do.

[TranquillityBase]

Thanks Tim-  I lost my youngest brother very recently, and it should've been his birthday last week.  That's how this one came to mind...  It's a kinda, sorta Christmas poem. I should've written this as "closer than MY tears" or "OUR tears" instead of "YOUR" tears, since he no longer has tears, but I/we still do.

I did wonder about the owner of those tears, so that would be a good change.

[Mark A Becker]

Thanks Tim-  I lost my youngest brother very recently, and it should've been his birthday last week.  That's how this one came to mind...  It's a kinda, sorta Christmas poem. I should've written this as "closer than MY tears" or "OUR tears" instead of "YOUR" tears, since he no longer has tears, but I/we still do.

I did wonder about the owner of those tears, so that would be a good change.

I made the revision.

[Poetry In Motion]

Interesting, poignant and to the point. Well done.