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From Empty Night
the first light breaks.
Finally then
the birds begin,
the cat wants out,
the paper's in,
coffee perking,
door bell ringing-
simple noises
sound like singing.
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(08-10-2022, 04:46 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: From Empty Night
the first light breaks.
Finally then
the birds begin,
the cat wants out,
the paper's in,
coffee perking,
door bell ringing-
simple noises
sound like singing.
Hi Mark,
Thank you. I enjoyed this one. Pretty much sums up my mornings. Except the door bell. Anyone that rings my bell at that hour will be disappointed! Sorry, no suggestions.
Take care,
steve
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Very nice, evocative in simple ways.
Author's known dislike for titles: addressed by making it an integral part of the first line. Clever.
Equally clever, the progression from broken night (broken by daybreak) to more regular rhythm and prevailing end-rhyme - the day harmonizes and much, if not all, is in order.
Good on you, keeping the cat in (at night). I thought I had neighbors' cats, but it turned out to be (volunteer) rabbits. The thumping! They, and the toads.
Non-practicing atheist