Others have written

[busker]

Others have written
of matters important,
I on the other hand
have written but of you,
cajoling words
to sing like a linnet
of the green gold summer
where the light’s never fading
in the endless minute
that I’m sitting with you.

[ellajam]

This is a poem easy to sink into. And it brought me this:

The common linnet (Linaria cannabina) is a small passerine bird of the finch family, Fringillidae. It derives its scientific name from its fondness for hemp and its English name from its liking for seeds of flax, from which linen is made.

which I love so thank you. Thanks for posting.

[Quixilated]

Hello Busker, this is very lovely.  I love how peaceful and wistful it feels.  I especially like "green gold summer" and "the endless minute."   Thank you for sharing. 

--Quix

[billy]

thanks for posting busker, an enjoyable little birdsong.

[busker]

Thanks, billy, ella, and quixillated.

[Thunderembargo]

Others have written
of matters important,
I on the other hand
have written but of you,
cajoling words
to sing like a linnet
of the green gold summer
where the light’s never fading
in the endless minute
that I’m sitting with you.

Like a superb impressionist painting---the poem lets the light rush in through the canvas, illuminating its cascading appearance with intoxicating, brilliant, rapid and flowing brush-strokes and capturing a singular image which speaks directly towards the audience

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This is a poem easy to sink into. And it brought me this:

The common linnet (Linaria cannabina) is a small passerine bird of the finch family, Fringillidae. It derives its scientific name from its fondness for hemp and its English name from its liking for seeds of flax, from which linen is made.  

which I love so thank you. Thanks for posting.

who knew there was such a bird     with such a sweet name.   perhaps the passerine's fondness for hemp is an indication of how the bird likes to spend his recreational time.

[poemblind]

very expressive. and enjoyable to read. liked the tittle - others have written lol

[Knot]

Hi Busker,
very nice, the romance not overdone
nor too sentimental. Strikes just the
right note I think.

Others have written
- maybe a different title?
Repeating it in the first line seems
a waste.

Others have written
of matters important,
- If you could stand the self-deprecation,
I'd suggest adding 'well' after 'written',
and maybe 'momentous' for 'improtant'?
(Or even, Others have written
of meaningful matters.)
I on the other hand
have written but of you,
'but' sounds wrong (to my ear), why not
'only' or 'merely'? Including the title, it's
the third instance of 'written' (and in such
a short poem too).
cajoling words
to sing like a linnet
- is there an alternative to 'sing'
(given how strong the next few lines
are)?
of the green gold summer
where the light’s never fading
in the endless minute
- very nice, thought the linnet/minute
rhyme is a bit of a surprise.
(maybe 'moment eternal' ?)
that I’m sitting with you.
- similarly, 'sitting' is a bit flat.


Best, Knot.


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[busker]

Thanks, thunder and knot.
Thunder - glad you liked it, thanks for pointing out the parts.
Knot - some great suggestions there, will work on them.

Poem - thanks for reading

[pigpoem]

the second line and the forth line made me feel so uncomfortable. but swings and round about as ends positive.  this is quite confusing poetry and I love the fact you have to think carefully of words to break it down.

Others have written
of matters important,
I on the other hand
have written but of you,
cajoling words
to sing like a linnet
of the green gold summer
where the light’s never fading
in the endless minute
that I’m sitting with you.