Library writing

[JaredEggo]

Here is my first attempt at Haiku, with my very limited knowledge of the style.

In the library
Children read and still make noise
I write to be calm...

[Lizzie]

To me, the first two lines don't connect well with the third. They're reading loudly in the library, and then the turn to your writing....I'm assuming that you're writing in the library and wishing for quiet? Or are the last two lines linked in terms of place -- the children are reading in the library and you are reading in the library, them wanting excitement and you wanting calm?

The "plot" if you will is not clear enough to me to make for a compelling read.

[Achebe]

Here is my first attempt at Haiku, with my very limited knowledge of the style.

In the library
Children read and still make noise
I write to be calm...

Children would not ordinarily engage in any activity to be calm, because they are .... children.
Therefore, the attempted contrast fails.
If it'd be been 'people' instead of 'children', it'd have still made sense.

But even then, it wouldn't be a haiku or any sort of poem, as it'd be all telling and no showing.