Sal[i]vation

[RiverNotch]

Sal[i]vation


God's taste in dramatic irony dictates
that though the world shall be destroyed by fire,
first floods of water formed by melting ice
should drown the coast and river valley towns.
And if those liberal citizens complain,
those baby-hatin', free-lovemakin' fags,
then all the more should hosts of angels laugh
while country voters roast Christ's paradise.

[kolemath]

Sal[i]vation


God's taste on dramatic irony dictates
that though the world shall be destroyed by fire, - I like the meaning even if the language is clunky
first floods of water formed by melting ice
should drown the coast and river valley towns. - great sound and words
And if those liberal citizens complain,
those baby-hatin', free-lovemakin' fags,-a little confused if the are complaints by them or insults to them.. Obviously the latter after a close reading but putting lib. Closer to the insults would clear that up
then all the more should hosts of angels laugh
while country voters roast Christ's paradise.-country voter is weak compared to the lib line..Maybe you're going for that

The poem cycles through the same logic twice which captures the lifecycles of earth..Which may not fit the linear logic of the Bible but..It works for me

[RiverNotch]

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, it's not meant to go any deeper than this baby-hatin', free-lovemakin' fag's complaint, so the cycling of logic is meant to be -- though as for the Bible having linear logic, I don't think so. It's hemispherical at best -- Adam close to God, Adam and his blood falling, Christ the new Adam raising up Adam and his fallen blood -- though considering the open-ended nature of Revelations (I'd like to think that "forever" is a relative term, insomuch as the early Church, through no fault of their own, believed that the Christ would return "soon") and the various ups and downs the Jewish people went through throughout history, there is the implication, hidden perhaps because the Abrahamic religions *love being so different*, or, better still, because the opposite arc is fundamentally a mystery, something that if fleshed out in text would lead only to a trap. But that's my personal take on it, and I'm naught but an armchair scholar.

On line six: agreed. Will think of something.
On line eight: I suppose that's the point where the speaker's skewering spreads its range, the implication being that it's the folks safe and secure in their inland homes/votes that are destroying the world, that are losing their souls. Where exactly do you think the line fails, though, at "country voters", or at its key thought, "roast Christ's paradise"?

Again, thanks for the feedback!