A Selfish Sinner's Prayer

[Mark A Becker]

A Selfish Sinner's Prayer

If you make it in to Heaven please try to save a place,
take along my picture so the Lord'll know my face,
please try to make my good side show,
if you make it in to Heaven when you go.  

If you make it in to Heaven, tell Jesus I'm OK
tell him I don't mean half the things I say,
if you see the Lord; if you get the chance,
please ask for some forgiveness, in advance,

I would be so happy if you wouldn't mind.
Yes, I would be so happy if you would be so kind.
Bless you, my friend, if you tell the Lord I tried,  
then I'll thank you very much, when I reach the other side.

... amen

[abu nuwas]

Very neat, rhyme, meter and so on. You missed out an ''it'' in l. 1.

It is witty; do you think it might have been improved if your fourth line read ''when you make it into Heaven - if you go'' ? Just a thought.

Four and a half out of ten. 

[RiverNotch]

Also the "it" in line 5.

[Mark A Becker]

Thanks Abu and Notch-

YEP, missed the "it" in those lines.

This is actually part of a song of mine, written long ago then forgotten, then posted (minus the chorus, which I can't quite remember).

I'm hoping by posting this one that the chorus will come back to me. Very simple tune in "G"...

... Mark