ripe

[Tiger the Lion]

september tomato
slips the fork;
the salad is over.

[just mercedes]

Yes, good image. salad days?

[Tiger the Lion]

Thanks Mercedes. Sometimes I'm so blocked I just wanna get 10 words right. Or half of them at least. Did you mean Salad Days as a title?

[rayheinrich]

september tomato
slips the fork;
the salad is over.

At first I thought: " 'Tomato' is a season word for summer, but that's ok I guess... "
BUT THEN I realized that by specifying that it was a 'september tomato' meant
that the salad really WAS over since there ain't gonna be no tomatoes 'til next year.

Wonderful.

[Erthona]

Paul,

Although your poem is already concise, I think a small edit might give it more punch...or not. Just a suggestion.

september tomato
slips fork;
salad over.

To me it just seems more rhythmically sound, so it has more energy. Just my feel of it. I might change my mind tomorrow

Dale

[Mwaba don]

september tomato
slips the fork;
the salad is over.

nice poem. it is humorous.