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Robin

Robin
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#1
08-13-2014, 10:17 AM
I pray you found a peaceful perch,
to watch us wriggling worms; unearthed
by your migration.
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#2
08-13-2014, 11:37 AM
I've always found myself enormously fond of alliterations.
I'll be there in a minute.
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#3
08-14-2014, 03:50 AM
I like this, particularly unearthed, which works both ways.
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#4
08-15-2014, 06:32 AM
Thank you news and ella. I have made a quick edit - changing the title to the original and correct "Robin". I'm really not sure why I shied away from using it when I first posted. Thanks for reading. Paul
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#5
08-15-2014, 07:11 AM
absolutely wonderful haiku.
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