FIrst post here.

[killthepoet]

Words were the first thing that I fell in love with. I started writing some amateur things in school, but now I feel like I have found myself a lot more and have a deeper appreciation and better grasp of the feelings I would like my poetry to project. I am posting here to get an idea of how it is received and to receive feedback from others, and I would greatly appreciate anything you guys have to say. Also, I have been writing for a some time anonymously on tumblr. killthepoet.tumblr.com if you would like to check out more or follow. Thank you
Here is a random one I pulled.


Can I sit and stay for a while?
Your policy on reservations…
I know, I know,
I just thought maybe
See the thing is
And your so
And I just

Let me start over
My stomach hurts when I think about you
doesn’t that count for something?

[heslopian]

"Your" should "you're", as in that context it's an abbreviation of "you are". This piece of dialogue is natural and well-written, but it doesn't suffice as a poem in and of itself, in my opinion. Maybe you could add some setting and characterisation, images etc.? Thank you for the read, and as they say to new MPs, welcome to the Pig Pen

[tigrflye]

Hi KTP,

Welcome! I like your poem. I also noticed you are leaving comments for other poets- great!. I hope you like the place and stay awhile. - Jenn