07-21-2012, 06:48 PM
@Leanne
Thank-you, I will try and think of a different way of expressing guilt being washed away. The repetition was meant to be intentional but if it doesn't work it doesn't work.
: P Well I failed in my point then.
Although it is a "vegetarian" poem it is more meant to be about factory farming and the abuse and cruelty animals go through before getting to the plate. I'm not anti-meat in particular, just anti-cruelty.
@billy
Yeah I'll change one of the washed's and tidy it up a bit.
The poem is meant to be about cruelty more then anti-meat completely, but I think it carries across that way. Hnn..
Thank-you, I will try and think of a different way of expressing guilt being washed away. The repetition was meant to be intentional but if it doesn't work it doesn't work.
: P Well I failed in my point then.
Although it is a "vegetarian" poem it is more meant to be about factory farming and the abuse and cruelty animals go through before getting to the plate. I'm not anti-meat in particular, just anti-cruelty.
@billy
Yeah I'll change one of the washed's and tidy it up a bit.
The poem is meant to be about cruelty more then anti-meat completely, but I think it carries across that way. Hnn..