paddygirl Wrote:Leanne, the lines you fixed for me had 7 syllables, I aimed for 8 in each line, when you get a chance can you explain this to me if poss. after your coffee obviouslyRemember to count stresses or beats, not syllables. You have four beats (4 feet) per line.
SHAdows | MIST and | SEEP through | SEAMS
trochee | trochee | trochee | trochee
MORPHED in | THREADS of | MUNdane | LIFE
trochee | trochee | trochee | trochee
beCOMing | COMPlex | PATTerned | DREAMS
amphibrach| trochee | trochee | trochee
to WEAVE these | TRAILing | WEBS of | STRIFE
amphibrach | trochee | trochee | trochee
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