A Call

[Paddygirl]

Here o’ earth city
I call onto you
Forge your blades and burden with steel and light -perhaps shorten this sentence by making a new line
So go forth brothers in arms -agree with comment on removing so
Go until your ghosts are within reach - like the imagery in this line
Forth into the maw
We come from a shattered legacy
Born out of darkness
But into the light, I say
For in the light lies truth and reconciliation -maybe remove 'and reconciliation' it doesn't fit with war
And in the twilights lies remembrance - like this line, gives balance when fighting for a cause
And in the dark lies nothing but darkness - prefer without 'but darkness'
Here in peril, we lie

Also, twilight needs to lose the s
a good read,some good imagery and I like the 'old worldie' feel! thank you for sharing.