nicotine and the ways of the universe

[Indie]

Thank you Philatone, I see where you're coming from with the extra words. In verse one, "her" refers to her belongings, denoting ownership. To take out "her" they could have been stolen belonging. I added in sat, because again, the character could be standing or walking around.

Overusing "that" is something I know I have to work on. It's one of those word traps that I fall into all the time.

"Universe" was meant to be a broad term in contrast to the rest of the poem.

Thanks again. I'll definitely consider your advice for the next edit.