A Call

[Timmycom]

Here o’ earth city
I call onto you
Forge your blades and burden with steel and light
So go forth brothers in arms
Go until your ghosts are within reach
Forth into the maw
We come from a shattered legacy
Born out of darkness
But into the light, I say
For in the light lies truth and reconciliation
And in the twilights lies remembrance
And in the dark lies nothing but darkness
Here in peril, we lie

One question which one sounds better?

And in the dark lies nothing but darkness
Or
And in the darkness lies nothing

Anyway, thanks.

Of the two choices the first sounds the best to me. Bare in mind it's 4am here, forgive me if this criteque is not up to standard.

This, to me - Sounds as if you have a frustration with people in general, like they're reluctent to do something about an issue and you are trying to motivate them to get and solve it. Like you have this pessimism for the human race in general, but you strive to correct it and make some good out of the past...

Grammatically it's perfect. A bit old worldie for my taste personally, I like the repution of the 'And's Highlights your point and the key concepts of the poem. Was an enjoyable poem to decifer.