07-11-2012, 05:07 AM
Nice job tying in the eagles on the flag, and I like rose as well, the double meaning calls to mind the red of the flag. Your image is good and if you don't mind, I'd just like to show you a quick way to get a little bit more out of your rhymes by moving your words around, such as:
How sweetly the flag
Rose over the hill
The wind unstill
To swell in the sky
Where eagles fly
("as eagles fly" might also work)
Hope that's not taking too many liberties with your poem
How sweetly the flag
Rose over the hill
The wind unstill
To swell in the sky
Where eagles fly
("as eagles fly" might also work)
Hope that's not taking too many liberties with your poem
It could be worse
