07-11-2012, 12:40 AM
"I Wonder as I Wander" is the title of a Christmas carol written by John Jacob Niles, and is also the first half of the first line. Generally posting a phrase of this length as your own when it is not would constitute plagiarism.
Most of the rest could probably be traced to song lyrics from various songs or poems
"Walking down these lonely oneway streets" is from a poem by James Adair
Most of the lines are like that, parts of, or snippets from other sources. I don't feel inclined to chase them all down. I'm not saying they are all plagiarized, just that they are extremely common and very overly used. I really see nothing I would count as original.
Pretty much the same can be said for your other piece. Really no different than most people's first jump into love poetry. It tends to be highly derivative, packed full of cliches and trite expressions. The overall problem with both is lack of any originality.
Personally, I think these would fail to pass a "Turing Test", they certainly give me pause.
Definitely post in the mild critique from now on and try and come up with something (from your own mind) that doesn't resemble something that has already been used thousands of times. Especially try and avoid complete phrases that also happen to be the title of well known songs
Dale
Most of the rest could probably be traced to song lyrics from various songs or poems
"Walking down these lonely oneway streets" is from a poem by James Adair
Most of the lines are like that, parts of, or snippets from other sources. I don't feel inclined to chase them all down. I'm not saying they are all plagiarized, just that they are extremely common and very overly used. I really see nothing I would count as original.
Pretty much the same can be said for your other piece. Really no different than most people's first jump into love poetry. It tends to be highly derivative, packed full of cliches and trite expressions. The overall problem with both is lack of any originality.
Personally, I think these would fail to pass a "Turing Test", they certainly give me pause.
Definitely post in the mild critique from now on and try and come up with something (from your own mind) that doesn't resemble something that has already been used thousands of times. Especially try and avoid complete phrases that also happen to be the title of well known songs
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.