07-09-2012, 07:08 AM
billy
-thanks!
ray
-i guess i could change the title to "checkmate" or something like that. i'll need some time to think of a way to make it clearer and drop more hints. to give the least away, it was supposed to capture a very specific moment in chess and the kinds of feelings involved. debated "promoted", but it felt more direct than I would like. will consider what you have said, thanks for the time and read
addy
-thanks for the read and kind words!
leanne
-good eye, my mistake. will delete the "was"; gramatically, still works fine. would a comma after "king" also help?
thanks for the time and read
-thanks!
ray
-i guess i could change the title to "checkmate" or something like that. i'll need some time to think of a way to make it clearer and drop more hints. to give the least away, it was supposed to capture a very specific moment in chess and the kinds of feelings involved. debated "promoted", but it felt more direct than I would like. will consider what you have said, thanks for the time and read
addy
-thanks for the read and kind words!
leanne
-good eye, my mistake. will delete the "was"; gramatically, still works fine. would a comma after "king" also help?
thanks for the time and read
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