Mate
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Geoff, great opening lines and the double metaphor of tree/chess extends well... but I wonder at the "was" in the last stanza, which for me would only work if there was no comma at the end of the first stanza... unless you mean that the cross was doing the stepping and I confess, that would leave me completely lost!
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Mate - by Philatone - 07-03-2012, 12:09 PM
RE: Mate - by billy - 07-03-2012, 01:01 PM
RE: Mate - by penguin - 07-06-2012, 11:03 PM
RE: Mate - by addy - 07-07-2012, 07:43 AM
RE: Mate - by Leanne - 07-08-2012, 05:47 AM
RE: Mate - by Philatone - 07-09-2012, 07:08 AM
RE: Mate - by Leanne - 07-09-2012, 07:38 AM
RE: Mate - by Philatone - 07-09-2012, 08:23 AM
RE: Mate - by arbil_poieo - 07-13-2012, 01:14 AM
RE: Mate - by Paddygirl - 07-16-2012, 01:00 PM
RE: Mate - by Philatone - 07-18-2012, 01:50 PM



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