nicotine and the ways of the universe

[Indie]

Thanks for your feedback Billy I changed (ignoring the fact that I don’t even smoke) to (ignoring the fact that I don’t smoke anymore). I like the beginning lines in the order they're in, though I can see where you're coming from. I also get where what you mean about the ending. Would tobacco suffice as a change or should do you think I should rewrite the last few lines to accommodate?

All Jack's yelling at me over my over use of grammar has sunk in. Much the the minor horror of this piece. I'll remedy that in the next edit.