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The Cat What came to Dinner

The Cat What came to Dinner
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06-30-2012, 12:30 PM
how about "claws pierce a birdies' heart" for the end?

besides that, I liked the moment you capture. the different ways of describing deception are great
Written only for you to consider.
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The Cat What came to Dinner - by Erthona - 06-30-2012, 12:03 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by Philatone - 06-30-2012, 12:30 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by Leanne - 06-30-2012, 05:03 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by penguin - 07-01-2012, 05:46 AM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by Erthona - 07-01-2012, 05:59 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by billy - 07-01-2012, 06:12 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by Erthona - 07-01-2012, 06:37 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by billy - 07-01-2012, 06:50 PM
RE: The Cat What came to Dinner - by Erthona - 07-01-2012, 07:59 PM



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