06-29-2012, 06:33 PM
Hello Leanne. I liked the rhythm of it too. I got the impression of some Kate Bush-like character eschewing fame for a proper life. But you'll probably tell me it's about a beached whale.
I think you could easily do without the 3rd verse.Though I like pop culture pocketbook prayer, I don't care for W-O-R-D-S.
Why not "fade into yesterday"? fade/wave.
Feels like there's a word missing at the end of the poem.again?
Ray
I think you could easily do without the 3rd verse.Though I like pop culture pocketbook prayer, I don't care for W-O-R-D-S.
Why not "fade into yesterday"? fade/wave.
Feels like there's a word missing at the end of the poem.again?
Ray
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.