06-27-2012, 10:02 AM
I already love the flow in this, and your turns of phrase are gorgeous. Again it's like we're left observing something huge and possibly wrathful through a delicate microcosm (the running, the countdown, the oppressive but sinking light , the protagonists characterized as "shadows"). I'm not sure if I'm getting it at all, but the hints are tantalizing
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?