After Birth Delight

[billy]

my first thought upon reading the title was to try and remember the tune to afternoon delight

but the poem. ...it was a wowzer. i wouldn't change a thing, the end rhymes are great but not as so as the content. the word flow you have going on is almost addictive. the consonance and assonance are excellent
i don't know how others would or do see this but it's one of the best pieces i've read in a long time. oh, and it's almost sonnet-like to boot. kudos

thanks for the read.