Tsunami-a spoken poem

[tectak]

Bad publicity is better than no publicity, and until I (mistakenly) reviewed it none was all it had.

"that horrid erthona has been nasty to me and says my poem is no good"

I never said it was no good, I said you did a poor job. It's not the poem fault you wee a slacker!
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"well, everything really and I like it so there and I may not take any noticeof him so there. Or I might."

You should. Even though this shouldn't have gotten a real critique, it deserved one. This poem is like a girl you got pregnant, you have a certain responsibility to see the thing through. This truly has the essence of a great poem, that doesn't happen often.

I know you have never read this aloud in public, if you had, you would have been cursing yourself, and wishing you had never thought of the line "I am the Sea." I speak from personal experience. I wrote a poem that had a phrase of about the same length as yours, and repeated about as often. Before I was half way through I was looking for a hole to hide in.

"I want you to ban him right"

If he didn't ban Ray... (Ray ban?) :p

Dale

Oh alright. Apology accepted. You were right on one thing. Of course I didn't read it! Some other poor sap stood up at a carved eagle rostrum in the chambers of a Bursar of a Durham University house and read it out loud at a poetry event in aid of the Japan Tsunami appeal. I had to leave early as I wanted to watch my electricity meter roll over from 999999 to 1000000.
I will give it a tinkering.
Best,
Tectak