Memory

[addy]

V.2 changes made on Dale's suggestions



It is easy to remove photographs
from a memory card;

three buttons to press in order
to unlock a blue screen,
a flash of an hourglass. By then,

the album empties itself. We only erase
the dining room, before paneling
was stripped by a hammer

held by a slender pair of hands.
Gone are the slides of the transition
from table and chandelier

to counter and floating island,
or even the glisten of those eyes
once dust thinned and the mask fell

in a picture. The first wall we ever took down
has no frame to remind us
of the color of the wood

we trashed, wiped, cleared,
deleted, erased, forgot.

Great edit . Just that small change at the end gave it that extra "oomph". I also like how you used "transition" in place of conversion... more seamless, and the floating island bit gives it a layer of dreaminess. Not sure what "mask fell in a pictue" was referring to, though.

I know "by then, the album empties itself" may not technically be correct as was pointed out, but I do like how "empties itself" sounds, imo.