06-08-2012, 07:55 AM
Bad publicity is better than no publicity, and until I (mistakenly) reviewed it none was all it had.
"that horrid erthona has been nasty to me and says my poem is no good"
I never said it was no good, I said you did a poor job. It's not the poem fault you wee a slacker!
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"well, everything really and I like it so there and I may not take any noticeof him so there. Or I might."
You should. Even though this shouldn't have gotten a real critique, it deserved one. This poem is like a girl you got pregnant, you have a certain responsibility to see the thing through. This truly has the essence of a great poem, that doesn't happen often.
I know you have never read this aloud in public, if you had, you would have been cursing yourself, and wishing you had never thought of the line "I am the Sea." I speak from personal experience. I wrote a poem that had a phrase of about the same length as yours, and repeated about as often. Before I was half way through I was looking for a hole to hide in.
"I want you to ban him right"
If he didn't ban Ray... (Ray ban?) :p
Dale
"that horrid erthona has been nasty to me and says my poem is no good"
I never said it was no good, I said you did a poor job. It's not the poem fault you wee a slacker!
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"well, everything really and I like it so there and I may not take any noticeof him so there. Or I might."
You should. Even though this shouldn't have gotten a real critique, it deserved one. This poem is like a girl you got pregnant, you have a certain responsibility to see the thing through. This truly has the essence of a great poem, that doesn't happen often.
I know you have never read this aloud in public, if you had, you would have been cursing yourself, and wishing you had never thought of the line "I am the Sea." I speak from personal experience. I wrote a poem that had a phrase of about the same length as yours, and repeated about as often. Before I was half way through I was looking for a hole to hide in.
"I want you to ban him right"
If he didn't ban Ray... (Ray ban?) :p
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.