I would talk to you of beauty

[tectak]

Interesting stuff. The opening two lines lead me to expect an ABAB rhyme. Maybe if there were a break between lines 2 and 3?

This would sound more natural to me

I would talk to you of beauty
and no more spew out bile and spite.

I think the 2nd verse would be excellent but for the 3rd line where you've one too many "of" and I'd prefer a semi-colon after crown.

I would talk to you of beauty,
of seas aglow with nuclear blue.
Foamed irridescence, hyaline white,

"nuclear blue" is there such a thing? Anyhow, it disturbs the rhythm a little and the following line throws it overboard.

failed fixes by the fallen made. - the weakest line, it sounds very, very forced to me.

I like what you're saying at the very end. Maybe "whilst words, well-chosen, only might".

Nice poem. I like rhythm and rhyme and I can see the effort that's gone in.

Thank you , penguin, for all your comments....I may have to agree with you on the "nuclear" thing...I have been forced to disarm by other critics It seemed like a good idea at the time.
Yes...you are correct on the surplicity of "of's". I will change in the next edit. "F F by the F made " has been changed twice but like you, I am still unhappy with it. The implication of change means a difficult rewrite of the stanza, which is conceptually a little different, and a little displaced from the other verses. I am attempting, in a light way, to imply that the overall beauty of the mountain hides the signs of deadly doings....falls, no less, but I want to pin the blame on the fallen!
This obviousy needs some work. I will get to it.
Thanks again for a good crit.
Best,
tectak