Generations

[addy]

A serviceable piece, i thought. At some points I felt it really building up to something a lot more daring, but majority of it covers well-trodden ground. Just my take

We are split you see,
son from father,
daughter from mother,
peas, de-shelled from the pod,
so spiritually blind we think holiness — God.

Yet, only our feet have trod upon our fellows, grinding
them to bone and blood, the profane as rampant
as before the flood: self-centeredness is truly binding,
taking our soul’s winding, laying it out upon the loom
of greedy & desirous hearts. We know nothing but a doom
that despoils any pretense of unsullied innocence. For me this part was a combination of strong and weak elements. "Self-centeredness is truly binding" sounds flat, and from the line "We know nothing but a doom..." it just sounds like you're running out of steam.

Soon my friends the bill will come due,
I see the knowledge in your eyes,
and know, you also know this too.
Bankrupt we stand on ever shifting quicksand,
our heads in hands -salt burnt tear blinded eyes-
we’ve not the means, and lack the knowledge to get by,
and so we quietly wallow here, in depression and despair, This part's over the top
at the end of our life's year.

"What else can we do", I hear you cry,
"when our Armageddon comes — fly?"
Does it really matter how long or short the hour,
we eventually succumb to a coward's
faint heart, whether slowly or quickly we die?
Will you try to stand tall and firm
against the ravaging ravenous tide?
It matters not, for it easily rolls you under,
forming another layer of sand,
where the next great group of fools
can blindly take their stand? I don't think this should end with a question mark. (That's if I'm reading it correctly)

©2012 -Erthona