Generations

[Erthona]

Thanks, good comments. I will look more at the punctuation, it is always unwieldy for me. Backwards into the breach!
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The last shall be first:

"The sentiment is a little global and non-specific "
Yes, but it still applies in terms of most of the human race. we are not so unique that we each need a different statement of our nature.
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"as if what has gone before does not lead us to such a familiar concept as the laying down of sedimentary souls"

Logic: There are fools. They are metaphorically standing. wherefore does their ground come? In some way it must come from those who went before, as Albert said, I stand on the shoulders of giants.
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"No question mark required here" don't know why it is.
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""It matters not " is more a cliche than a figure of speech. In this room, it matters not""

Conversational, so a certain amount of triteness is allowed to lube the gears
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"we depart??" toooo much
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""Yes to the sentiment but I think there is a weakness encouraged by the sudden desire to force a rhyme. Even "Die?" instead of "fly" would make an ironic contribution. Not sure on this as there is a "die" coming"

There was a fly in the ointment first, before the other posers. Will think upon it.
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"I see the knowledge in your eyes,
and know, you also know this too.Perhaps a little clumpy in a tectak sort of way. I know you know I know this, too"

The speaker is saying he knows because he is one of them, so it is not said in a condemning way.
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"You will not win the worst poem contest with this. The sentiment is reminiscent of Tolstoy. Something out of "What men live by and other tales. You will pick up on this more than I. It has been a long time! "

It has been 40 years for me, although I read a little Chekhov recently, a review of the Cherry Orchard.
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"Is the "yet" required?"

Yes. To show that this is only man, and not also in conjunction with God.
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"without punctuation in this line there is a double meaning. Maybe your intent. Do you mean the quantative "so" or the conditional "so"? Both work."

The "so" modifies "blind", as in excessively. So I guess I mean qualitatively so So no to both!
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"Think perhaps just "shelled" would work as de-shelled implies a previous shelling!"

No by this point we are twice shelled. Once at birth, and once in isolation from each other.

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I will consider what you have written, especially the "it matters not' which was done somewhat unthinkingly. Of course I may not have a better option. What I was trying to imply is "Oh well, it doesn't really matter one way or the other, as you end up in the same spot." It's a cynical invalidation of any type of integrity, or honor. As, in the end we are all just sediment and it doesn't matter how you lived, whether a murder or a humanitarian, it's all one in the same.

Anyway, thanks for the read. I always enjoy your comments.

Dale