“So, The Wind Blows?”

[tectak]

I’ve been waiting my whole life to finally get young,"be" is better than "get" as "get" is possessive and not chronologically linked. It is awkward to "wait to get young". Better to "wait to be young".
I hope I’m still here when it finally comes,...and this makes the point. Logical grammar gives us " I hope I'm still here when young finally comes". So..." I hope I'm still here when youth finally comes"
and if I am, hope that I am new hung,
so I can sing of it with an unnoted tongue.Interesting thoughts come into my mind. New hung could be pre-pubescent so "unnoted" (I know it is deliberate) whilst literally meaning "not noticed", could also equate to, because of that one word "so", castrati. Or not.

Still, my belly’s distended from starving too well,Yes to this. Profundity made clear. Allelujah!!
everyone here’s paying for heaven with hell, You could drop the "here's" and allow "paying" its full quota of syllables. Surely "here's" a given....and stop calling me Shirley
but to me a tie makes you look like a whore,Comma after me , but the next line is just great..... if a little BDylan-esque, motor psycho nightmare.
and I already told them I don’t do that no more..

Now that I’m here, I’m all goose pimp-pel-ly,Not a crime but pimp-pel-ly is genre-insensitive and stretched to con-tri-van-ce.
I think I am close to who I thought I should beSome punctuation here
thanks for small favors, the should-er is dead,I am baffled by the words, confused by your explanation, interested in the thought process, happy with the outcome.....but feeling somehow inadequate. Is this your intent?
he went out like a dog, when properly fed.

My food’s always had, that killing effect,drop the comma after "had". What is it there for?
a little more spicy, than you’d probably expect,drop the comma after "spicy". What is it there for?

I prefer a good truth, that’ll stick to your ribs, ,drop the comma after "truth". What is it there for?

though he often speaks with a tongue that ain’t his.Great stanza. A piece of art on it's own..but the "he" in L4 could be capitalised as it sits unsecured with the "them" in S2, L4

This time I’ll not go, up to Cavalry’s Hill,Surely not. CALVARY?,drop the comma after "go". What is it there for?

so when it repeats, it won't be me that they kill.
but the past you can't hide, if you'd start new again,
and you can’t sail away, if there isn’t a wind. Trite but final. I would have liked more of this.

©2012 —Erthona

Note. The title is taken from the title of a book with more or less the same name "Where the Wind Blows".. It was (the book) a satirical look at the advice the government had given people in the event of a nuclear war, advice that as the book points out was for the most part nonsense. However, the idea of the wind blowing just means that trouble is coming (although in the title of this poem, it also works as a double entendre) probably because the wind that proceeds the leading edge of a frontal system, and following shortly behind it would probably be one of the worst storms of the season. Worst, If for no other reason that the that leading edge could gain rotation and start throwing off tornados, as well as it generally being one of the storms with the highest lighten potential. Personally, I didn’t think this needed explaining, as it is a fairly well know cultural idiom. However, I have been fooled before. The poem on the whole however is not written idiomatically, but rather as archetypal.
Oh, and yes, it was purposeful using "unnoted" rather than "unnoticed".

I am hesitantly glad I left this one to set in the pan before I cut into it. I have also had the good fortune to read your comments in reply to, but not explanation for, the critics. I believe I knew in advance what your stance and ethos, as expressed here, would be....and I applaud it all.
Now, to the piece itself....fore armed if not fore warned.
Your explanation, NEVER a good idea to explain as you well know, serves no real purpose insofar as the enjoyment of the piece is concerned...and it is a concern. The merit of a piece of edge-on terse-verse lies in the depth of feeling felt BY the reader FOR the writer. It is an exchange of emotional currency. There is an expression...look after the pennies and the pounds look after themselves.....to keep the metaphor rolling. This piece is penny-full. The pounds will only be assessed by counting the pennies. For me, the penny worth parts are S1, L1...fortunately, as it is the opener. Then S2, L1 and 2 then SEPERATELY S2, L3 and L4 . Not quite a pound, yet.
Overall this is probably a little too enigmatic for old purists like me but it will thwart the sooth-sayers who like to predict that if it don't set it ain't aspic.
This one has definitely set and I am not sure if you would want to change it even if you could...it would just be too compliant to do so!
I would, though, change the title. It is so immediately lost once the reading starts that looking back to see where you are going only causes more confusion!
The usual grammatical inconsistencies can be excused due to your advanced years...but should you ever become newly hung I will expect no more dangled participles.
Best,
tectak