05-28-2012, 11:33 AM
Erk... sorry way2epic.
Okay, dialing back the critique, the crux of it is you should cut down on some of the repetition... after a while repeating words make the poem flat rather than dramatic. Try to use it sparsely
Okay, dialing back the critique, the crux of it is you should cut down on some of the repetition... after a while repeating words make the poem flat rather than dramatic. Try to use it sparsely
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?