feedback for my poem?

[Indie]

A shattered mountain stands still
Thunder roars from its peaks
Lit by a wall of lighting
Running down its cliffs this entire section is a contradiction of itself. Also do you mean lightning?

Its crags, holds the bones of thousands
No mere mortal dare scale these walls

Walls of earth and stone
A fortress of rock Unneeded repetition in these two lines

A destroyer of men
Unconquerable by mortals
But one dares to defy
He stands there
Gazing up at the peaks
A man
A man who once stood on a cliff
Waiting for the corsairs of fate.
A man, who battled beasts of mind and flesh
A man, scarred by light
Maimed by shadow
Gazing up at the peaks unneeded repetition of an above line
At the highest peaks
Lies treasures of a thousand desires
Drawing men
Like a moth to an all-consuming flame
He knows
He knows his destiny
He knows why he must scale this testament of death
To find a soul he once lost
In a sea of doubt
Though tide and time, he has searched
The script of his life
Written on his back
Written in the ink of fate
By the hand of destiny itself
He knows his destiny, his fate
But still he searches
A soul, once lost
Lies to rest at the peak
At very top, of this testament to death

now with
"Written in the ink of fate
By the hand of destiny itself
He knows his destiny, his fate"
any idea with what words i can use there instead of destiny for the last line there? i can't think of any that has the same effect.
and if you have an idea for a title that'd be great.
so any feedback if you've got it. thanks.

I know this is mild critique, so I did cut myself off above on the crit, to avoid being too heavy handed. Apologies if I'm over-enthusiastic in my feedback. This poem has potential to be something more but right now it rambles a lot, with many contradictions in the imagery and unneeded repetition of concepts that only need to be told once. Best advice I can offer is break it down and really think about what you want to say to tighten it up.

Hope this helps.
Peace, Indie