05-20-2012, 01:49 AM
Hi Indie,
Thanks for your perceptive crit. Most, but not all, if your points are covered in my reply to phil. I admit that this one doesn't get the concept across. The puzzlement you expressed in "hold still as death" is obvious, but "for life prepare" needs a little thought. The death of the prey means life to the lions.
Your point on "slowly stalk" is noted and may bring about a change. Do you have a dog? If you have you will notice that it stalks , a rabbit, for example,too quickly when it is inexperienced. With time it learns to take it slowly!
Nonetheless. Point well made.
No....lions do not fly......but watch one make a pounce......it comes close.
Craving....mmmmmm.....not sure what you are objecting here.......I am a lion in this piece. I crave meat.
Again, I am pleased with your comments. Watch for changes....credit to you as always.
Best,
Tectak
Thanks for your perceptive crit. Most, but not all, if your points are covered in my reply to phil. I admit that this one doesn't get the concept across. The puzzlement you expressed in "hold still as death" is obvious, but "for life prepare" needs a little thought. The death of the prey means life to the lions.
Your point on "slowly stalk" is noted and may bring about a change. Do you have a dog? If you have you will notice that it stalks , a rabbit, for example,too quickly when it is inexperienced. With time it learns to take it slowly!
Nonetheless. Point well made.
No....lions do not fly......but watch one make a pounce......it comes close.
Craving....mmmmmm.....not sure what you are objecting here.......I am a lion in this piece. I crave meat.
Again, I am pleased with your comments. Watch for changes....credit to you as always.
Best,
Tectak