Auteurs

[billy]

sorry for missing this one jack. been busy

"A bunch of guys standing around trying to catch some director pushing art up into the crevices of dreck." - Manny Farber, American film critic, describing the auteur theory i'm not sure the header is needed. i still had to google auteur theory; which made the intro redundant.

Below the images he hides a portion of his soul,
like a sparrow's corpse in a tobacco tin. i think this is a great image, would it work better as a metaphor?
When Daisy Danger pulled her piece
from the pocket of her dress,
and Michael Kent christened her skull with a bat,
a weird light peered back from the page
like spring through bullet holes.

The author loved his mother once,
but now all women must be hurt.
"Daisy Danger's phallic piece
was knocked from her jezebel hands,
the magazine breaking her foot. would the magazine fall out
'I got no time for whores and queers,'
Kent grunted as he slapped her face,
'I'm tougher than my momma's tights.'"

Picking through the mounds of trash
one may find our sad auteur,
his frail soul, that dead sparrow,
glimpsed in accidental symbols.

"Michael Kent sat on his bed and poured himself some rye.
The bottle he poured was tighter than Daisy's vagina
(which he'd been sure to examine for clues).
She spanked him like a momma would, with open palm and -"
the author decides to put the bottle away.

having read it more than a couple of times, both here and there. i think some of the lines too flippant. tighter than daisy's vadge, (don't jezabels have loose ones )

while i still find it funny, i wasn't keen on the repetition apart from the sparrow image. i think you have a real easy task of making this a more solid piece with an edit

thanks for the read.