05-06-2012, 12:42 PM
"but back to the haiku...it isn't one, it has two cutting points and no seasonal word, it's also not about a single moment/image. it probably resides more in the senryu."
True, if this were a serious attempt at a Haiku instead of a satirical poke at the whole idea of Haiku in English. ---------------------------------------------------------
" it's not really a translation problem"
technically it is a phonemerpretation within an idiomatic milieu problem, although I think you are imposing a limitation on the word "translate" which doesn't actually exists
However, I am glad you enjoyed it.
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If I lost the third line, it would lose its sublime redundancy!
Dale
True, if this were a serious attempt at a Haiku instead of a satirical poke at the whole idea of Haiku in English. ---------------------------------------------------------
" it's not really a translation problem"
technically it is a phonemerpretation within an idiomatic milieu problem, although I think you are imposing a limitation on the word "translate" which doesn't actually exists
However, I am glad you enjoyed it.
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If I lost the third line, it would lose its sublime redundancy!
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.