First Last Thoughts

[tectak]

That last paragraph is stunning; it's where the poem really hit its stride. The first two were a bit slow-going but lovely nonetheless. The second stanza is my least favorite: I don't think anything particularly interesting grips me from it... L3 in particular lets you down, I think, marring an otherwise great piece. Just imo, though.

Thanks addy. That bloody third line s2 annoys me, too. I keep leaving out a word tgen sticking it back in again. Right now I am happy with it but tomorrow...who knows! Any suggestions welcome. Credit will be given!
Best,
Tectak