04-29-2012, 10:51 AM
(04-29-2012, 10:15 AM)addy Wrote: You painted a very nice tableau here. Personally I liked the addition of "I would imagine".... that, as well as the principal's office line and the line about the pimples, hints at the narrator's youth; females are largely a mystery, and their motivations even more so. It is blind, uncertain exploration on both sides.Thanks a lot, Addy. I really wanted this to be a stark look into a moment that impressed the narrator for his entire life. The blood is a part of the striking images I imagine must stick with someone.
The "bringing blood" line was unexpected, my first hint that there may be some darker things beneath the surface, not just an awkward first time scene. Enjoyed this poem overall


