04-23-2012, 09:53 AM
That last paragraph is stunning; it's where the poem really hit its stride. The first two were a bit slow-going but lovely nonetheless. The second stanza is my least favorite: I don't think anything particularly interesting grips me from it... L3 in particular lets you down, I think, marring an otherwise great piece. Just imo, though.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?