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Coffee at lunch
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04-21-2012, 02:21 AM
I am torn. On the one hand, I think the 3rd and 4th lines are mostly unnecessary, with the exception of the hunching bit. On the other, I feel that there is a place for thin, reedy writing, where not every word is full of colour, and where many do not move things on at all. A mood can still be created in that way. I hope these thoughts are of some use.
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Coffee at lunch - by Chaotic Body - 04-18-2012, 12:00 AM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by Erthona - 04-19-2012, 12:11 PM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by Philatone - 04-19-2012, 01:09 PM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by billy - 04-19-2012, 05:41 PM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by abu nuwas - 04-21-2012, 02:21 AM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by Erthona - 04-23-2012, 04:45 PM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by billy - 04-28-2012, 03:34 PM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by tectak - 04-23-2012, 05:21 PM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by Erthona - 05-03-2012, 10:46 AM
RE: Coffee at lunch - by billy - 05-03-2012, 11:07 AM
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