04-19-2012, 12:11 PM
I get where you are trying to go by the ending (which I think is valid), however the way in which the rest is written was confusing, and I was not even sure if it was just one person you were talking about until the end. Caps at the start of all the lines could be removed.
Dale
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.