The Wild Hunt ..
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I loved the opening build up, I wanted it to be a ghost story of some kind and to be worried that telling the story itself is somehow inviting supernatural forces.. something like that.

This line-
"A fuel tank with a steamer as its berth."

I feel like it's too long, maybe drop the a
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The Wild Hunt .. - by abu nuwas - 04-06-2012, 09:15 PM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by billy - 04-08-2012, 12:18 PM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by abu nuwas - 04-19-2012, 07:53 AM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by Bronte - 04-08-2012, 03:42 PM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by Erthona - 04-17-2012, 08:31 PM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by Chaotic Body - 04-17-2012, 11:31 PM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by Erthona - 04-18-2012, 01:12 AM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by Erthona - 04-19-2012, 12:03 PM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by abu nuwas - 04-20-2012, 06:07 AM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by tectak - 05-02-2012, 05:57 AM
RE: The Wild Hunt .. - by abu nuwas - 05-02-2012, 10:13 AM



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